Directions:
Part I. Read the following segment of essay on Harry Potter. As you are reading the essay circle mistakes that the author (Mr. Mullady) has made in the paper. Be sure to look for the following mistakes: run on sentences, incorrect thesis statement, spelling, and capitalization.
Part II.
Rewrite the Thesis Paragraph of the essay. Use the format that was discussed in class. Then, make an outline of what the rest of the essay should look like.
His parents were murdered. An abusive aunt and uncle raised him. His cousin bullied him and at school was a social outcast. Despite these horrific facts, Harry Potter was a generous, kind, loyal, and brave young man, who risked his life to save others and did not let his past get in the way of his future. Is Harry Potter a role model for young people? I say, “Yes.”
Harry’s childhood was marked with tragedy at an early statge. Born to wizard parents James and Lilly Potter, Harry’s parents were grisly murdered by Lord Voldermort when he was a baby. Growing up, Harry was raised by his Aunt Petunia and Uncle Vernon Dursley. The Dursley’s had one son, Dudley who was showered with love and affection while Harry was neglected. Harry was forced to live in the cupboard under the stairs and wear hand me downs while Dudley was given anything he wanted.
When Harry is admitted into Hogwarts he meets Hermoine Granger and Ron Weasley. Ron and Hermoine are two of Harry’s closest friends and the three of them are members of the Griffindor House.
